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“唔、唔嗯……明智先生……”
在稍稍顯得有些心酸的哭了一會後,趴在小蘭身上的園子,正一臉委屈的看向高遠,臉上倒也沒有真的流露出多少眼淚,隻是似乎對於高遠這麽直白的說辭感到大受打擊——
“至少……可、可以告訴我是哪裏無趣,讓我當作參考嗎?”
“嗯……”
看著如此堅持的園子,似乎對於這個話劇的劇本的執著是認真的,高遠稍稍組織了一下語言,大概說道:
“簡單來說,就是普通。開篇發生事件,警察到達現場進行調查,然後發現現場留下的線索,並找到指名兇手的證據……這樣的敘事,作為一篇短小故事來說實在過於普通……”
如此說著,高遠話語稍稍停頓了一下,略顯無奈的說道:
“當然,故事短小、劇情普通,這對於推理來說並不是主要的問題,因為推理的樂趣在於最後的解謎,隻要最後的解謎足夠有趣、足夠精彩,那麽這就是一篇優秀的作品了。但是,作為話劇……”
說到這,高遠不免看向了身側的小哀,很是認同小哀剛才的說法的,繼續說道:
“小哀剛才說的很對,開篇直接就是冗長的調查跟詢問情節,要是就這樣演出來,對於平時不看類似作品的觀眾來說,就實在太過於折磨了。這不像是推理是有著專門的受眾的,慈善話劇終究是要麵向到時來觀看的各種群體的……”
“唔、唔……那、那……”
聽到高遠這麽說,園子肩膀不斷的抖動著,似乎鼓起勇氣想要反駁,但話到嘴邊又不知道該說些什麽——
“所以,與其寫這種推理故事的劇本,我覺得不如還是寫一些老少皆宜的故事吧!像是童話啊、喜劇什麽的,都是不錯的選擇!”
最終,高遠如此建議道。
而對於這樣的建議,小哀,還有柯南兩人,都默默的點了點頭,感覺十分合理。
“可……可是……”
但園子,似乎仍舊不死心的,有些委屈的說道:
“我就是想寫這樣的劇本嘛!像童話故事什麽的,那未免也太普通了!”
有些無理取鬧的,靠在小蘭身上的園子坐起了身,撒嬌似得發起了牢騷,這看的一旁的高遠、小哀、柯南等人一臉無奈——
“對啊對啊!”
但是,對於園子的說法,光彥卻出聲支持道:
“那種一點都不真實的童話故事,演起來一點勁都沒有!而且,我覺得園子姐姐寫的劇本,真的還蠻真實的哎!”
“對吧對吧!”
聽到有人支持自己的想法,園子頓時來了精神,剛才的悲傷感一下子就被她甩到腦後,認真的說道:
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“唔、唔嗯……明智先生……”
在稍稍顯得有些心酸的哭了一會後,趴在小蘭身上的園子,正一臉委屈的看向高遠,臉上倒也沒有真的流露出多少眼淚,隻是似乎對於高遠這麽直白的說辭感到大受打擊——
“至少……可、可以告訴我是哪裏無趣,讓我當作參考嗎?”
“嗯……”
看著如此堅持的園子,似乎對於這個話劇的劇本的執著是認真的,高遠稍稍組織了一下語言,大概說道:
“簡單來說,就是普通。開篇發生事件,警察到達現場進行調查,然後發現現場留下的線索,並找到指名兇手的證據……這樣的敘事,作為一篇短小故事來說實在過於普通……”
如此說著,高遠話語稍稍停頓了一下,略顯無奈的說道:
“當然,故事短小、劇情普通,這對於推理來說並不是主要的問題,因為推理的樂趣在於最後的解謎,隻要最後的解謎足夠有趣、足夠精彩,那麽這就是一篇優秀的作品了。但是,作為話劇……”
說到這,高遠不免看向了身側的小哀,很是認同小哀剛才的說法的,繼續說道:
“小哀剛才說的很對,開篇直接就是冗長的調查跟詢問情節,要是就這樣演出來,對於平時不看類似作品的觀眾來說,就實在太過於折磨了。這不像是推理是有著專門的受眾的,慈善話劇終究是要麵向到時來觀看的各種群體的……”
“唔、唔……那、那……”
聽到高遠這麽說,園子肩膀不斷的抖動著,似乎鼓起勇氣想要反駁,但話到嘴邊又不知道該說些什麽——
“所以,與其寫這種推理故事的劇本,我覺得不如還是寫一些老少皆宜的故事吧!像是童話啊、喜劇什麽的,都是不錯的選擇!”
最終,高遠如此建議道。
而對於這樣的建議,小哀,還有柯南兩人,都默默的點了點頭,感覺十分合理。
“可……可是……”
但園子,似乎仍舊不死心的,有些委屈的說道:
“我就是想寫這樣的劇本嘛!像童話故事什麽的,那未免也太普通了!”
有些無理取鬧的,靠在小蘭身上的園子坐起了身,撒嬌似得發起了牢騷,這看的一旁的高遠、小哀、柯南等人一臉無奈——
“對啊對啊!”
但是,對於園子的說法,光彥卻出聲支持道:
“那種一點都不真實的童話故事,演起來一點勁都沒有!而且,我覺得園子姐姐寫的劇本,真的還蠻真實的哎!”
“對吧對吧!”
聽到有人支持自己的想法,園子頓時來了精神,剛才的悲傷感一下子就被她甩到腦後,認真的說道:
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